Brilliant screenplay! Often we do not approach short films as something that can provide a
comparable level of emotional satisfaction as a feature length movie. However, there are some
exceptions to that rule and Nightcap is one of those. Aside from the screenplay having some
camera direction, which is breaking a cardinal rule of screenwriting, the diegesis is well
structures and paced equally as well.
The characters display sufficient development, and come off as true-to-life individuals that you may have encountered in the past—well, hopefully not in exactly the same method. I was glued to the words the whole time that I read it, and it totally threw me for a loop at the end. It contains all the earmarks of a great visual story and never leaves you wandering through the pages. Honestly, there are not any area of improvement, besides removing any camera directions.
I think that we could have a little more development in the bar and perhaps some more content in the hotel room. The beginning and ending are great! And the second act is good too. If there was just a little more action in the bar, I think this would be perfect! Is it material that would be good in a a feature screenplay? Possibly. But I think this is one that is best experienced and appreciated as a thrilling short.
The characters display sufficient development, and come off as true-to-life individuals that you may have encountered in the past—well, hopefully not in exactly the same method. I was glued to the words the whole time that I read it, and it totally threw me for a loop at the end. It contains all the earmarks of a great visual story and never leaves you wandering through the pages. Honestly, there are not any area of improvement, besides removing any camera directions.
I think that we could have a little more development in the bar and perhaps some more content in the hotel room. The beginning and ending are great! And the second act is good too. If there was just a little more action in the bar, I think this would be perfect! Is it material that would be good in a a feature screenplay? Possibly. But I think this is one that is best experienced and appreciated as a thrilling short.
